Your song wakes the earth,
Opens flowers to the sun,
Bids the stones to breathe.
One Deep Breath
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Sunday, February 24, 2008
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I like the last line the most. it's like new life is starting with just one song. very nice.
i am with lissa,, that last line is a gem... very well crafted...
Your poem is a song, Sandy. It is so peaceful and spiritual. Thank you so much. Michael and I have left a response on the blog about your comment. You were so wonderful. Well, Michael left a comment! LOL Our submission can be found here. Thank you for visiting.
Sandy: I was wondering if you would be willing to be the creative force to continue One Deep Breath. I can do the technical stuff on my blog. I don't know if I am overestimating the work required to do it or not. But I was thinking you could come up with themes, I could post and do Mr. Linky. I have no ability to think of themes. Think about it?
I'd be game!
I love it. Also, yes, the last line is quite interesting and attention grabbing. However, with so few words there is a lot to see and the mind wanders all over the place.
Lovely! Lovely!
I enjoyed the whole, what a song!
Lovely picture (in my mind Botticelli's Primavera).
spring on the way...
A lovely song of awakening!
I was sad to read that One Deep Breath is to end. I would be willing to offer support by providing the occasional theme. I am keen to continue developing haiku.
I was so pleasantly surprised when after I had my walk about this morning and came in to read my fav blogs. I came upon your haiku. I just saw how some of the stones in our garden are emerging from the snow. It just seemed to fit with your poem.
I too, had a hint of spring in mine this week. I do like the way you being.. with a song. Lovely. I'm so glad you two are planning on an alternative site. I'd be happy to help in any way I can - with ideas or techy stuff too.
your words evoke an everyday miracle that we take for granted...very lovely. & thank you so much for continuing the weekly prompts with andree!
A short but powerful lyric of rebirth. Well done!
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